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Students today can easily access information online, so libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

#students #access #information #libraries
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It is true that nowadays
students
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 can quickly get most
information
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 through the Internet.
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, I disagree with the idea of abolishing libraries because they are important roles in our lives. On the one hand, I believe that Internet accessibility provides us
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faster way to get
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. The main reason is that there is
latest
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 knowledge online, and the
data
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 is easy to access by just searching the keywords.
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, people can use online services without a time and place limit, they can check
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 any time as well as everywhere.
For instance
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, youngsters who are planning to go on a vacation,
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can use Google
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 to help them find the route before the trip.
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, there exists some false
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in
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 some websites, and the youth should be careful when checking it.
On the other hand
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, I would argue that the library still stands a vital role in our daily lives.
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, it provides us with a quiet place for studying, which was important for
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 preparing for a test. Take the study room
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 example, every time during the final exam week, there are always full of hard-working
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 preparing for the upcoming exam.
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, there are bountiful theoretical
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 in a library than on the website,
students
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 can find more detailed
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 to support their papers.
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, the books or
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 we found in a library are accurate
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 provided by scholars. In conclusion, I believe that online searching is indispensable in our lives by enabling us to find
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 quickly, but libraries are equally important for providing us with study places, detailed
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, and reliable
data
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.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessible information
  • online databases
  • e-books
  • educational websites
  • community centers
  • physical books
  • literacy programs
  • peer-reviewed resources
  • misleading information
  • digital divide
  • high-speed internet
  • underprivileged communities
  • custodians of culture
  • archival material
  • conducive environment
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