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Academic task 2 Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the present age, where the debate between single-sex
schools
 and mixed
schools
 has become predominantly more. Some people assert single-sex
schools
 provide better academic achievements.
On the other
hand
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 mixed
schools
 offer social skills. Personally, I am in the favour of
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 view.
To begin
 with Co-education,
schools
 have more chances to conduct interactive sessions for the opposite
gender
, so that
students
 get to learn multiple skills at an early stage,
Moreover
students
 would have a wide range of problem-solving capabilities,
for instance
,if a girl had a problem with a boy, both must cope to solve their issue. In
such
 a way
that
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students
 can overcome any kind of fear towards others or
to
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face any problematic situations. Admittedly, single-sex
schools
 have fewer distractions to other things
such
 as opposite
gender
 infatuation, dress code, and
gender
 bias.
This
 is the reason that
students
 perform well
academicall
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academically
,
However
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 they must have to learn and enhance their communication skills with another
gender
, even after finishing their schooling period. In my view,
students
 must opt for mixed
schools
 to explore a variety of opportunities and to enrich themselves academically and in communication as well.
Students
 will be counselled well enough by their supervisors or headmaster when they get distracted or got stuck in any kind of external situation.
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