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Academic task 2 Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the present age, where the debate between single-sex
schools
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 and mixed
schools
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 has become predominantly more. Some people assert single-sex
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 provide better academic achievements.
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 mixed
schools
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 offer social skills. Personally, I am in the favour of
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 view.
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 with Co-education,
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 have more chances to conduct interactive sessions for the opposite
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, so that
students
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 get to learn multiple skills at an early stage,
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students
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 would have a wide range of problem-solving capabilities,
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,if a girl had a problem with a boy, both must cope to solve their issue. In
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 a way
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students
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 can overcome any kind of fear towards others or
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face any problematic situations. Admittedly, single-sex
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 have fewer distractions to other things
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 as opposite
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 infatuation, dress code, and
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 bias.
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 is the reason that
students
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 perform well
academicall
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academically
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 they must have to learn and enhance their communication skills with another
gender
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, even after finishing their schooling period. In my view,
students
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 must opt for mixed
schools
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 to explore a variety of opportunities and to enrich themselves academically and in communication as well.
Students
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 will be counselled well enough by their supervisors or headmaster when they get distracted or got stuck in any kind of external situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimize distractions
  • gender-related learning styles
  • tailored learning environment
  • sense of empowerment
  • underrepresented
  • bridge the gender gap
  • emulate real-world environments
  • promoting interactions
  • communicate and collaborate
  • break down gender stereotypes
  • mutual respect
  • inclusivity
  • well-rounded individuals
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