Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvanges on rely too much on technology?

Nowadays ,
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technology
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is increasingly popular in
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of
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premises.The advent of
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makes
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easier and faster compared to
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days.
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,the setbacks of
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on
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is
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unemployment and eye
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.
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details
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the drawbacks and how machinery has changed the way
employees
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function
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in subsequent paragraphs .
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with,Technological development help make
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simple ,
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and quickly
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quickly
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and reduce cost compared to the ancient times. In the past ,Companies employ
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to send
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letters to their various business partners and customer which takes
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a day
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day
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to reach them.
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with the advancement in
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such
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as
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computers
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,
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are able to send information to their client
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the shortest possible time.
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,Manager uses computers to send email to their customers which is very quick and simple than in the past
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a messenger has to send it to the post office to be delivered to various clients.
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takes more time depending on the location of the individual.
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,Organisation will not pay any salary to employ
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to send
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a letter
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letter
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letters
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around to various
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customers
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.
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help to allocate the money that will be given to
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to be
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in different sector of the company and
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reduce finances. Again, two drawbacks of current
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is
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unemployment and eye
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.
Employees
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are glued to
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a computer
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screen
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screens
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during working hours which
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for more than 10 hours. Exposure to the screen for a long time causes vision
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problem
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in the future.
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, a recent survey conducted
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that most of their retired
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had sight
problem
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due to the use of
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a computer
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during their working period.
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,
technology
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like concrete mixer machine can do a
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that about 30
employees
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can do. Companies use
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to supplant
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thereby sacking some
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result in
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the loss
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of jobs. In conclusion, Technological development has
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workers
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in their
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environment to make
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simple ,
quick
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and quick
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and helps Organisations to reduce their finances.
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,it is detrimental to their health causing sight
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problem
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problems
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and loss of jobs in companies.

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