You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter o give details of your study plans o explain why you want to get a part-time job o suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Zoe, I hope you are doing well in Singapore. I am writing

this

letter to you as I would like you to know about my study plan at National Technology University (NTU) Singapore and I want to ask you how to apply for part-time jobs.

To begin

with, it is a great chance for me to get an offer from the university in order to study Electronic -Engineering Courses as a full-time student and

this

is for two-year courses. As you know, the courses and accommodation fees in Singapore are very expensive.

Therefore

, I would like to do a part-time

job

while I am studying in order to meet my basic needs. To be frank with you, I am not quite sure how to search or apply for a part-time

job

Moreover

, I am pretty sure that you are able to help me since you have been working there for over five years and you could give me advice on some

job

applications that are useful especially for students to find a part-time

job

. I hope you could help me with

this

case and see you in the near future. Best Regards Sandar Myint

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

195 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational aspirations
Work experience
Financial independence
Resume (or CV)
Local job market
International student
Legal requirements
Student work permit
Employment trends
Time management
Networking
A part-time position
Balance studies and work
Job hunting strategies

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