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Goverments should spent money on railways rather than roads.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Although
 government spend money on
roads
, priority is given to
railways
.In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the issue.
Firstly
,
railways
 are the fastest mode of
transportation
.It can be used not only for mass
transportation
 of
people
 from one place the another but
also
 for
transportation
 of commercial goods to different places within the country.
For instance
,in ,India around 2 million
people
 travel by railway which became an integral part of their
life's
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. The development of the railway creates a lot of employment opportunities
to
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 the
people
 and it
also
 boosts the country's economy.
Moreover
, recent advancements in
railways
 can decrease the travelling time and one can reach their destination within
short
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 duration.
On the other hand
,
roads
 are mandatory in one's life.Without
roads
, travelling will be difficult. Even though
railways
 are
a
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far superior
modes
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 of
transportation
 compared to
roads
,
but
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the connectivity of
railways
 is not over the entire country.
For example
, in India, 70% of
people
lives
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 in villages. The mode of
transportation
 for the
the
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rural pupil is only by road.Till today there are few villages in India that do not have road facilities. So
finally
 I conclude that even though
railways
 and
roads
 are having their own merits, the government should give equal importance to the development of
roads
 and
railways
.
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