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Band 2

In many developed countries, fast food is cheap and widely available. Many people tend to choose unhealthy options. Why do many people tend to choose unhealthy options? What can governments do to solve this problems?

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 operation by which
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, cream and butter are produced. Overall, the operation includes 8 stages which are man-made and linear. It begins with cows grazing
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 place where people
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, it will be sent to refrigeration storage. It will help the
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not get
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 it moved to a tanker where
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 will be daily delivered to
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. Following that, In the Dairy, people divide the
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two groups.
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 will be put in pasteurized bottles and get packaged. From
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 into the markets and shops.
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