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Nations should spend more money on skills and vocational training for practical work, rather than on university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to ongoing changes and shortages in the labour market, some contend that the vast majority of funding for tertiary
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 should be put into practical courses rather than academic ones. Despite strong arguments to support
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, I can only agree with
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 to some extent. The push on a global scale to get more graduates with
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 degrees has led to a lack of manual workers
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 as plumbers and electricians and an excess of white-collar workers.
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 of
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, skilled tradespeople can earn much higher wages than in the past whereas
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 graduates are leaving
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 with huge debts from student loans. Recently, it was reported that 1000 people applied for one job in a restaurant and many of the applicants were graduates. Having a degree,
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, does not necessarily lead to a well-paid, high-flying job.
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, for some fields
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 as medicine or
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, an academic
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 is a prerequisite. Worryingly, the number of doctors in undergraduate training is dropping at an alarming rate and
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 will lead to a scarcity of GPs and surgeons in the near future. To combat
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, there needs to be more investment in secondary and
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 to try to encourage more school leavers to take
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 career path. In conclusion,
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 funding for vocational training is a must,
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 should not be at the expense of academic
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. Despite the threat of a worldwide economic recession, funding in all aspects of
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 needs to be a priority and it should be allocated to vocational and academic courses on an equal basis.
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