Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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Some may argue that the main source of happiness in

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money

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. While I agree that financial wealth can make us happy to some extent, I do not compare that it is a key to each and every problem in our

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. So there are other things

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as friends and family that can bring joy. I mentioned above, an instrument which makes leaving easier. For a variety of things from consumer products to healthcare and Social Security, we need to spend

money

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. Having said that, I do not believe that being rich can make a person fortunate. If so, we would not read and hear about so many celebrities and media moguls who suffer from depression and even commit suicide. As a matter of fact, the real source of Joy and feeling content are other things. One of them is our social network: friends, family, neighbours and so on. The relationship with others has a great impact on unloading us.

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, in the event of difficult times, having a heart-to-heart with a close friend can relieve the pain. Another important factor is the mindset. The way an individual sees the various aspects of

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is influential to his or her emotions.

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, for an excessive perfectionist who can never get satisfied with his doings or what he has, it is arduous to reach a happy point. Another example is the people who believe the more they give the more they feel fortunate and they practice it in real

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, the ones we have around or integral to our happiness since their positivity can add 2 hours, the love the competition they offer enriches our

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. To sum up,

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I cannot deny that

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matters and makes

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more comfortable in so many ways, I am in accord with those who think other factors like friends and perspective can surpass the power of

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in many aspects.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

322 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Financial security
Basic needs
Comfort
Luxury
Freedom
Altruistic
Philanthropy
Nurturing relationships
Fulfillment
Sense of accomplishment
Physical well-being
Spiritual beliefs
Community involvement
Gratitude
Mindfulness
Simple pleasures

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