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The internet has changed the way we interact with each other now compared to in the past. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In the 21st century, the
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 has become the fastest means of communication. Since its introduction, our methods of interacting with each other
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 taken a turn. In
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 essay, I will discuss its benefits and highlight its drawbacks. There are mainly two ways in which the
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 has altered the way we related to each other.
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, messages are conveyed virtually more than face-to-face.
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 change is observed in about 95% of our daily
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, with students and clients opting for online classes and meetings respectively rather than the typical class lessons.
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, connections are closer than ever now as people communicate using cell phones
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 distance to physically hold conversations with loved ones, as done in the past.
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 opens room for daily updates which in return, strengthens bonds. Even though the
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 has benefits, the disadvantages cannot be overlooked. People have
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in person
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. They find themselves anxious or lacking the coordination to hold a conversation with family, friends or even acquittances.
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, a downward trend in family time has been recorded as kids are glued to their mobiles all day playing online games or chatting.
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 has really affected meaningful
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 in the family as well as relationships. In conclusion,
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 the
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 has improved
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 between individuals, the
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drawbacks
 cannot be
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. And in my view, in as much as it is a tool of importance, in
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 day and age, proper boundaries should be set to prioritise meaningful connections as soon
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • instantaneous communication
  • social media platforms
  • virtual meetings
  • e-commerce
  • global marketplaces
  • streaming services
  • online gaming
  • content creation
  • remote working
  • cyberbullying
  • internet addiction
  • access to information
  • professional development
  • privacy concerns
  • educational resources
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