In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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today's world, applications in
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cellphones
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known as
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popular
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easy access and without fearing about cash. To commence with, no doubt, online applications are like
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golden opportunities
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an individual.
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or double clicking the side button and
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near
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a person
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or cards free.
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, transactions or bills
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into the phone's list so it
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make
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a human paperless. To epitome, a survey conducted by researchers in America
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idicates
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using online
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inclining
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one can go online shopping or payment through the
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sign
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these websites and no need to put
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card numbers or details again and again. To add it on,
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these websites on their
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. To explain it, it is
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like
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mobile.
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The Times of India, it was a headline related 70% of mankind are
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using
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and are satisfied with
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going penniless or plastic money has only
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done by online websites which is
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called digital money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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