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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #person’s #culture #character #choice #clothes
The importance of clothes to
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judge
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character
 which was always debatable has now become more
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controversial
.The substantial influence of
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controversy over
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 potential impact in recent years. In my
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 the latter proposition appears to be more rational.
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foremost reason behind
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 is that we can judge the culture of the
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depending
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depending
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 outfit and
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appeal
apparel
.
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 if a
person
 is from village área of
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 they normally wear kurta
pjama
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pyjama
, whereas a
person
 from the city área they wear Jeans,
tshirt
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T-shirt
shirt
t-shirt
, shirt.
Cateforically
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 discussing, it cannot be ignored that the main reason
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behind
this
 that as per the choice of
clother
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clothes
clothing
 we cannot make
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 on the attitude of the
person
. Probing ahead, one of the main underlying
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 steams from the
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 is that culture is
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developed
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developed
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 which type of environment he or she is grown up
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what
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 type of experience he or she has gained,
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beliefs
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beliefs
 and ethics he or she follows.
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 recently we have
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 the news of
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 that saints have been arrested for
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 the land and sexual
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harassment
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harassment
 cases.
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clothes
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 not identified once attitude and
character
 of the
person
. It varies from
person
 to
person
 clothes are the only choice of the
person
 what he or she
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 to wear. To culminate, I reiterate that there are plenty of strong factors supporting that outfit of the
person
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 the
character
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character
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 where he or she is brought up and how they are get
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developed
 mentally and physically.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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