Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

Tourism is always popular
now days
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due to globalization and with the help of
technology
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there is a freedom to travel and explore the world.
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some people are very
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different
diffrerent
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different
they
dont
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don't
like to explore the
place
where everybody has already
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.
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are
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very
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countable person who
travel
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to
the
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place
which is less explored like
Antartica
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Antarctica
and Sahara desert, both are different in there on geographical área and climatic condition. In my coming
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I will highlight the merits and
demertis
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demerits
of the
unexplore
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unexplored
places. The advantage of
such
a rare explored
place
is due to huge land área you will not feel crowded. The
Antartica
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Antarctica
Antarctic
climate condition is extremely cold
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through out
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the year, the
place
is very quiet and the population is in
hundreads
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hundreds
.
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as
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Sahara
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the Sahara
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desert is the hottest
place
on earth and it is
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world
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biggest desert where
population
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the population
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is very limited and people explore the
place
to get relax in
peaceful
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environment. With the passage of time if tourism
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develops
develps
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develops
further
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it could
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attract
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attract
more entertainment-
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related
companies
provide
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more
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opportunities
opportinities
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opportunities
to enjoy themselves. There are
also
very few drawbacks currently attached to
such
area
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. The people with children will not more likely to enjoy the
place
in few days they will get bored because there no
such
place
enjoyment facilities are available
On the other hand
if anybody
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injured there is very limited access to medical assistance or got lost in huge land the option are very limited to rescue them. In that
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Company and Government
has
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to work together In conclusion, the new places will never get stopped to
be explore
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, if there are facilities and
equipments
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are available to
tackel
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tackle
the difficult situation,
this
is bring
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travellers to explore the area which
were
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never usually taken
in to
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consideration in order to visit.
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