Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic.

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Tourism is always popular

now days

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due to globalization and with the help of

technology

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there is a freedom to travel and explore the world.

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some people are very

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different

diffrerent

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different

they

dont

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don't

like to explore the

place

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where everybody has already

did

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there

are

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very

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a very

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countable person who

travel

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the

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place

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which is less explored like

Antartica

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Antarctica

and Sahara desert, both are different in there on geographical área and climatic condition. In my coming

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I will highlight the merits and

demertis

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demerits

of the

unexplore

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unexplored

places. The advantage of

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a rare explored

place

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is due to huge land área you will not feel crowded. The

Antartica

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Antarctica

Antarctic

climate condition is extremely cold

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through out

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the year, the

place

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is very quiet and the population is in

hundreads

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hundreds

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Sahara

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the Sahara

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desert is the hottest

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on earth and it is

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world

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biggest desert where

population

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is very limited and people explore the

place

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to get relax in

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environment. With the passage of time if tourism

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develops

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develops

further

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it could

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attract

attaract

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attract

more entertainment-

releted

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companies

provide

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opportunities

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opportunities

to enjoy themselves. There are

also

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very few drawbacks currently attached to

such

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area

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. The people with children will not more likely to enjoy the

place

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in few days they will get bored because there no

such

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place

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enjoyment facilities are available

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if anybody

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injured there is very limited access to medical assistance or got lost in huge land the option are very limited to rescue them. In that

case

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Company and Government

has

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to work together In conclusion, the new places will never get stopped to

be explore

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, if there are facilities and

equipments

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equipment

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are available to

tackel

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tackle

the difficult situation,

this

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is bring

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travellers to explore the area which

were

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never usually taken

in to

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consideration in order to visit.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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