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some countries are planing to use fussil fuels as the main source of energy.However, Sime countries opine that wind power and nuclar power are the best alternative.

Nowadays, A number of countries consider
fuels
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 as the main source of
energy
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.
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 other parts of the world are of the opinion that nuclear and solar powers are the best source to be replaced fossil
fuels
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. I strongly, Agree with those people who claim that every single society seems to consider fossil
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 as gasoline or petrol as the most important source of
energy
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. Even though we should know that there should be a good and useful replacement for
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 sort of
energy
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. Because of at least these two main reasons.
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, fossil
fuels
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 are not renewable and
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 will be vanished. gasoline and petrol and other
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 which are from fossils. On a rainy ,day we will face not have any of these energies and perceive that what should we do? The answer is obvious. government must consider alternative
sources
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instead
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 of those which will be finished one day.
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, What is better than some
sources
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 which are with the human beings until ever. As we know wind and solar power are kinds of
sources
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 which will be renewable.
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 these are the best alternatives.
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, the pollution
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 produced by fossil
fuels
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 is too much and can affect the environment in a bad way. It is brightly seen that emissions which are rise from burning
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 these
fuels
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 would pilot and contaminate the environment more and more.
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, alternative
sources
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 of
energy
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 will not hurt the environment at all. To sum up, We can reach the conclusion that because fusilli
fuels
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 will disappear one day and can contaminate the surrounded space. Governers should determine the best alternative
sources
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 for them which are not as bad as those.

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