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it is unaccepted that people who work in certain professions e.g finance, media,entertainmentand sports are paid high salaries while the others, who do more important jobs in society are underpaid. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that
people
 working in the
entertainment
 industry, media and sports are paid higher compared to
people
 who do more important jobs as
people
 working in the medical field, economists and others. In my point of view, both
people
 working in the
entertainment
 or medical field should receive equal payments.
This
 essay will shed some light on the reasons why.
Firstly
, artists and greater sportsmen are an asset to the country as they represent the country globally. It is true that world-renowned artists
such
 as Rowan Atkinson, Jhony Deep or sportsmen
as
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 Ronaldo are paid millions of dollars for an episode or a tournament but in ,return the government can collect a substantial amount of tax.
Moreover
, entering
to
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the main
entertainment
 industries
such
 as Hollywood or Bollywood is not easy. The actors or actresses undergo several years of training and hard
work
 to get signed to a major role.
Similarly
, to enter into the national team they undergo training for years.
Thus
, are paid a higher salary to keep them in the industry.
on the other hand
, the government should pay more attention to
community
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the community
a community
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 working in other fields
such
 as surgeons, economists and cadre. Surgeons spend about seven years to become one
however
 their salary is comparatively low. Doctors and nurses
work
 extra long hours but their salary is comparatively less.
Similarly
, teachers are paid a lower
in
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compared
to
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 the
work
 they do. Teachers have to
work
 a minimum of six hours at school and they
also
 spend extra time checking pupils' homework.
However
, they receive a bare minimum and in order for them to earn
more
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 they have to do extra classes. in conclusion, it is true that
people
 in the
entertainment
 industry, sports and other fields are paid more than surgeons or teachers. I believe that all the
people
 who perform an important job in
the
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society should be paid equally.
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