A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir I hope you are doing well. I have heard from our community about your company will invest in our living area, either on young kid's sports team or concerts,
that is
very good for us. I will give you my opinion on both of them. To commence with, the physical is good for our body and mental health. I like running, and most of my friends play football with me. It is very important for pioneers to play basketball, football, or any other sports, as that will build up their young body and be good for their mental health. So if you can sponsor our children's sports team, that will be very cool and help youngers grow up.
Also
, the concerts on our distinct are very important. Not only just because we can listen to classic and famous music,
thus
we can relax and cool down, but
also
the concerts will give our citizens a bay for the soul to live on. It will decline the crime ratio in our area. Best regards, Yours sincerely. Cole Chen
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