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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think that its essential to learn. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #history #waste #time
Nowadays, there are two views, some
people
 think that when we are reading
history
, in fact, we want to waste our
time
 and someone else think that
this
 is necessary for our future, I firmly believe that
this
 will be very crucial for knowing about the past,
this
 essay will check both views and I express my perspective in the end. On the one hand, there are many
people
 who have an idea, they think studying
history
 will waste their
time
,
for
this
 reason, they
do
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are
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 not interested in reading
history
also
 they want to offer other
people
 that
this
 is detrimental
for
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to
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 their
time
as well as
people
 can do many things that may be helpful for their future,
in addition
, they do not know about past,
for example
, one of my friends always say about the
history
 it is inefficient in today's world and all things have changed in comparison to past.
On the other hand
,
history
 is like a light, that causes
we
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us
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 can find our way in the future through studying about past, definitely, having magnificent information can help us to find the best way and
this
 will lead to when we can recognize our way really fast we can save our
time
 for different our aims,
for instance
, I personally read many stories from the
history
 and
this
 helps me to make a good decision in my life
also
 the
history
 will repeat more and more and we can use them for different issues. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
history
 can be a very good course in order we decrease our
fault
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,
finally
, if we want to live very
safe
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safely
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 we should study
history
 and we have to collect information about the past,
this
 can happen through the internet that really good source for searching about the
history
.
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