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More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress. What do you think are the causes of this? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

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Today's
duty
 style is a source of stress according to a large number of people.The reason for
such
 conditions could be the long hours of working, competition at the job places and sometimes rotating schedules.
However
,we can not change the work fashion but recommend possible remedies like the flexibility of day, a shorter working week and team engagement in a workforce.
To begin
 with,hectic workload and roaster are the biggest contributors to
duty
-related strain.
This
 means that employees are remaining under
duty
 pressure all day at the job as well as they do not get enough occasion to recover from the above-mentioned workload.
Furthermore
, a number of companies go for continental and rotating duties. Data from WCB Bulletin suggests that 30% of employees have stress disorders in present staff.
Additionally
, there is a large number of applicants for one vacancy which leads to passive competition for survival in the job. Possible solutions could vary from site to site and depending on the task force.
Although
 we can not take away the tensions in industries still, we can try to remedy the issue by engaging enforcement agencies to monitor businesses for following standards of labour engagement according to needs.
Hence
, making the workplace safe and sound for the individuals employed there.
Moreover
, shortening the working week into five days will provide much-needed hours for rest ,as well as alleviate anxiety.
In other words
, it will remove strain and allow them to work with full energy.
Last
 but not least,forming a workplace health and safety committee will ensure a friendly working environment in the warehouse. In conclusion, the present era of labourers is full of tensity due to tight work arrangements and demand of
duty
 and can overcome
this
 situation by adapting strain-friendly
duty
 environment and minimising the pressure-related disorder in the working individuals.
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