Advertising is all around us; it is an unavoidable part of everyone’ life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
day and age, advertisement
is all around us, from leaflets that we occasionally receive walking across streets to advertisement
Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
the
pop up on websites. For some may be a way to be introduced to something new, while others may think it is misleading.
Correct your spelling
that
To begin
with, advertisements can be argued to be beneficial for companies as it
allow startups to increase their exposure in the public’s eye. Correct pronoun usage
they
Yeah
some argue that Add the punctuation
,Yeah
whoever
Change the pronoun
whomever
assessment
you can understand the benefits of a Replace the word
assesses
product
and will allow us to make the correct decision. For example
, when a cosmetic brand advertise
its latest foundation they often state the strength of Change the verb form
advertises
their
Correct pronoun usage
its
product
. Such
as the ability to cover up dark circles, by stating the characteristics of their own product
, it
allows consumers to choose carefully and make the smartest choice. Correct pronoun usage
apply
In addition
, the use of efforts could put in a horror sense, for reading adverts we could develop our understanding on current trends, as well as discovering new goods and services available in the market.
On the other hand
, some argued
Wrong verb form
argue
advertisement
or misleading and put the two irrational choices. Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
For instance
, companies may exaggerate the benefits of specific products. One example would be dietary products. Firms may emphasise the regular intake of the dietary product
within a week allow
them to lose more than 2 kg. Wrong verb form
allowing
However
in reality
it is Add the comma(s)
, in reality,
almost
impossible Add an article
the almost
an almost
end
Add the particle
to end
and
healthy to lose Change preposition
up and
huge
amount of weight in a short period of time. Correct article usage
a huge
Nevertheless
, side effects of dietary products are usually avoided on
Change preposition
in
the
Correct article usage
apply
advertisement
. As a result
, consumers may be misled to believe that there are no side-effects
, which poses a risk Correct your spelling
side effects
on
Change preposition
to
the
health.
In conclusion, Change the word
their
although
advertisements may be beneficial in terms of introducing us to the latest items, misleading
Add an article
the misleading
a misleading
advertisement
may lead to the waste of money or worse, health issues. Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
Hence
, the drawbacks of advertisements overtake its strength.Submitted by mlukmd809 on
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