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In the future more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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Deciding on international
holiday
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 destinations will be more challenging in comparison to a domestic vacation. I somewhat disagree with
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 statement,
however
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, believe that those choices will be governed more by social, economic & political scenarios. To start with,
consumers
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consumers'
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 ability to spend has been on a rise in
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last
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the last
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 decade and
continue
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 to go up. The ability to spend more plays an important role in choosing a
destination
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,
that is
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in
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 reach for any family or
individuals
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.
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, choosing an international
destination
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 is
also
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 influenced by
social
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the social
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 status of an individual. The attitude to
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 plays an important role in deciding the
holiday
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destination
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.
People
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 like to brag about their plans and what they did during the vacation via various social networking sites, that in turn motivates the friends to explore international
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. Lately, medical situations across the world
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has
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 been governed,
as to
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by
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 how and where
people
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 go for vacations. A lot of international
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 was restricted for ensuring
safety
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the safety
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 of tourists and residents.
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 has resulted in
people
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 choosing more domestic
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destination
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destinations
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 in
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last
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 couple of years and they have been putting
the
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international
travel
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 on a back seat. With
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the pandemic
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pandemic
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pandemics
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 coming under control,
people
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 want to
travel
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 far and enjoy the time away from what they are used to. One of the important factors in deciding
a
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on a
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holiday
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 or a vacation
destination
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 is the finance and the
costing
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 of it. Recently, all the international destinations are coming out with attractive offers to lure tourists across the world. Even the international airlines
,
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 trying their best to offer deals, that will attract anyone to plan an international
holiday
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. Holidays are
essential
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an essential
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 part of rejuvenating and refreshing oneself. It is imperative that we take a break from what do on a regular basis be it international or domestic.
At
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 the end, I believe that
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the socio-economic
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socio-economic
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socioeconomic
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 status of a family plays an important role in deciding where to go.
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