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The government should control the Internet to reduce cyber crime and ensure safety of users. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Many individuals argue that in order to limit the occurrences of
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 crime and keep users safe, the government should check
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usage
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. I completely agree that web
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 should be restricted as
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 will drastically reduce incidences of fraud and greatly protect the type of content
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 children are exposed to. An important reason to limit
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 it will, to a large extent, decrease incidences of online fraud. Presently, in many countries, since the use of the web is not censored, many
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criminal minded
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 individuals create malicious
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 that can collect the private information of unsuspecting
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Internet
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 users and use these to obtain their bank details
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 defraud them. If the government puts a check on
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 of these
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, the number of cyber crimes will reduce, and the arrests and consequent punishment of the perpetrators of these acts will serve as a deterrent to others. A good number of countries
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 as Saudi Arabia,
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, have already created these
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 inhibitions which ensure that only authorized institutions can have access to people's bank details because all phishing
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 are monitored and shut down.
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, their citizens are able to use the
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 safely.
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, controlling
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 can prevent impressionable young children from being exposed to dangerous online content. Pornography is an enormous problem these days and has ruined the lives of many younglings because they try to experiment with information gotten from
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 which contain these potentially destructive illicit materials. For
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 reason, the government should ensure that anyone who requests access to these
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 must provide a valid identity card to show that they are
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. A good example of countries with
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 India.
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 country experience a more wholesome and untainted childhood. In conclusion, it is imperative that
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 is restricted by the authorities in order to limit the incidences of web-based criminal activities and protect the kind of content that children consume.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybercrime
  • regulations
  • monitoring
  • suspicious activities
  • internet safety
  • user trust
  • e-commerce
  • censorship
  • freedom of speech
  • access to information
  • over-regulation
  • innovation
  • tech industry
  • data protection
  • identity theft
  • financial fraud
  • technical limitations
  • digital landscape
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