Many young people today spend too much time following the latest fashion trends in areas such as clothing and technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, as a new generation is moving forward, they are using excessive
time
on fashion and technology like shopping, mobile and laptop. Even, children
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youtube videos on mobile for
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time
. I completely agree with
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statement.
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, everyone
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easy access to the internet and on mobile
the
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can access it 24/7 any
time
any where
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. there are
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lost
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of social media platforms available today, and people are posting videos about new fashion and other technology.
Youngster
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are spending lots of
time
on
this
platform and under the infuse they try to follow the trends they are spending
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clothing and accessories. For
instant
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, if any popular
tiktoker
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TikTok
post and video about new accessories, many people
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will buy and
ware
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wear
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the same thing to follow the trend.
In addition
, children are
also
spending their
time
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watching
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the video
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video
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videos
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.
for
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kids who are barely able to spik but they can
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operate mobile and watch cocomelon videos on youtube.
Secondly
, technology is getting more sophisticated, youngster are using
internet
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the internet
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on mobile,
laptop
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laptops
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and tablets for study, research and entertainment.
for
example
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there are
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lost
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of ebooks and information on
wikipedia
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are
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available easily, in past days kids
are have
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to use books like
encyclopedia
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an encyclopedia
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, atlas to get information.
similarly
, previously movies are available only on
chinema
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cinema
hall or video tap now they can watch on
mobile
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a mobile
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app
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apps
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like
netflix
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Netflix
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,
hulu
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. To conclude, in
this
social media era, young kids are spending much
time
to
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following the trends.
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, they use
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mobile
and laptops for
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time
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the time
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period to study and entertainment
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fashion-forward
  • Trendsetting
  • Peer pressure
  • Consumerism
  • Brand-conscious
  • Social media influencers
  • Sustainable fashion
  • Eco-consciousness
  • Disposable income
  • Fast fashion
  • Technophile
  • Digital divide
  • Planned obsolescence
  • Status symbol
  • Cutting-edge
  • Materialistic
  • Ethical consumerism
  • Personal identity
  • Body image
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