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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, Everything is getting changed around the world especially with dramatically growing population what is why some other countries changed their eating habits their
food
 souses basis by
insects
 while others consider about
insect
 source apparently not only unhealthy for the human body but
also
 badly affect the environment.In
this
 ,
an
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essay I intend to discuss these situations' the pros and cons.
First
 of all, a few decades ago some other countries had consumed any kind of
insects
such
 as
insect
 powder and
insect
 flour. Put more simply, some nations develop
insect
sources
 through technology.
As a
result
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 we didn't notice about some of our
food
 contains
insect
sources
 things. One of the perfect examples of
this
 is Chinese
people
 always prepare their summit and wealthy dinner eat
insects
 sometimes they are eating naturally sometimes never notices for grocery
sources
such
 as
insect
 flour and hamburger even
insect
 powder contains protein bar which allover
people
 most likely goods.
Secondly
 and even more importantly though, more and more
people
 are eating
insects
 unhealthy humankind and
also
 even our nature.
That is
 to say that
insects
 are the same as
people
 they think that birds just eat
insects
 ,not a human.
Consequently
, as long as some
people
 eat
sources
 of any kind of
insect
 they would become weak and even have some disease. One of the good examples of
this
 is Covid 19 too quick spread in the world from 2019 until now. The main reason was one of the Chinese summit
food
 which is some
people
 had eaten bet
then
that is
 the reason why the bet had a virus. By way of conclusion, Everything getting changed in the world
such
 as the use their
food
 by
insects
 because of the increasing population.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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