The government should invest more money in teaching science than in other subjects for a country development and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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one of the major

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to enhance human life. It is even essential to the extent that we practice

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there are more foundation things citizens have the right to

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should not spend extra

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basic needs like food, education, and

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by developing other important sectors. So in

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the desire of all social levels.

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the main institution of the

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, all sectors if we spend extra

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essential needs

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all

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Environmental problems such as pollution and climatic variations are increasing nowadays. The governments have taken some measures at a global level. But they got only few solutions. Why is it so? How can this problem be solved?

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