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The government should invest more money in teaching science than in other subjects for a country development and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #science #subjects #country #development #progress
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sicence
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science
 consider
as
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one of the major
subject
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 to enhance human life. It is even essential to the extent that we practice
sicence
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science
silence
everyday
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 and
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everywhere
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every where
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everywhere
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.
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, I disagree that
government
 should spend more
money
 to develop
this
 sector due to some reasons.
Government's
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 responsibility is considered more important needs than
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the developing
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developing
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development
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the
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of the
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country
.
Beside
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 that
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interest
intrest
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interest
 in
science
 is not for everyone.
First
 of all,
although
science
 is important
but
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there are more foundation things citizens have the right to
fulfill
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fulfil
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.
For instance
,
government
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the government
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 should not spend extra
money
 on other things if
people
 do not have
the
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basic needs like food, education, and
shelters
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shelter
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. If the
government
 fulfilled these basic needs
then
 it can move to
next
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the next
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stage
satge
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stage
 by developing other important sectors. So in
this
 case
government
 should consider their priorities
first
 and
then
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decide
deside
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decide
 how to spend the
money
.
Secondly
,
science
 is a subject that some
people
 do not like to tackle
it
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apply
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.
For example
,
government
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the government
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 should
fulfilled
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 the desire of all social levels.
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Citizens
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Citizen
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A citizen
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 who
enjoy
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 art and
nusic
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music
 have the right as well to have the
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interest
intrest
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interest
from
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 the main institution of the
country
.
Furthermore
, all sectors if we spend extra
money
 on them will help to develop the
country
. To conclude, as mentioned above
science
 is
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important
importan
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important
 but
still
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,still
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 there are
mone
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many
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 essential needs
people
 have the right to have,
besides
 that,
science
 is not the interest
for
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of
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 all
people
 who live in the
country
. It will be unfair to neglect other fields.
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