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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 fast-paced world,
technology
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significant
significat
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significant
 advances in the world. some individuals ween that the advanced
technology
 is modifying many parts of our lives and it plays a dominant role in our routine
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activities
activites
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activities
. In
this
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 point.
To begin
 with, most
of
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the
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things are innovated and invented with the help of
technology
. where
technology
 plays a vital role in our day-to-day life. In
early
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 days,
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in
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the home
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home
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 the clothes are washed with our hands but now
technology
 gave us
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 machine, which reduces the human work.
Moreover
, nowadays,
lessiure
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leisure
 time is mostly
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by
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using the mobile phone itself where we can connect with our
friend
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friends
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 anywhere in the world.
In addition
, in
job
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a job
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 or school, computers
occupies
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 a major part, where we can get all the
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information's
informations
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information
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 and the most important advancement which
technology
 gave us is
internet
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the internet
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 where
,
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 everyone
are
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 connected
all together
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.
For example
, In a recent survey,
its
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 is
show
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 that peoples
life style
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lifestyle
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 and daily routines are engaged by
internet
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the internet
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.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
in
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the
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technology
 too. Due to the advancement of the
technology
 in
internet
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,
internet
 scams and theft are
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occurring
occuring
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occurring
 more frequently.
Furthermore
, most of the students are distracted by
internet
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the internet
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 and
not
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concentrating
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 on their
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studies
studeis
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studies
.
In addition
, the relationship bondings are becoming weaker with the evolution of
internet
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 where we spend most of the time
in
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on
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phone
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phones
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. To illustrate, in a recent survey, it is shown that nowadays most of the illegal
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activities
activites
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activities
 are
ocuuring
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occurring
 by the use of
technology
. To conclude, the
technology
 reduces manpower, working time and other things are the positive sides and the student
distracion
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distraction
distractions
,theft are the negative sides of the
technology
. There are more benefits
while
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comparing
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with
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 the drawbacks.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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