The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing?

We are in a celebrity-obsessed world, and what famous persons especially those with ordinary backgrounds say or do always make news headlines. The factors contributing to
this
phenomenon will be discussed in
this
essay along with the reasons why I believe
this
is a curse rather than a blessing. The obvious gap in the living standards between well-known persons and ordinary
people
results in
this
phenomenon. It is generally acknowledged that the vast majority of
celebrities
can monetize their accounts and accumulate massive wealth instantly, purchasing what their desire without taking costs into consideration.
Conversely
, the average
people
are confronted with various problems caused by not having enough money.
For example
, they find it difficult to buy a flat or afford the tuition fee for their children.
Hence
, ordinary
people
who struggle to afford even the basic necessities of life have so much interest in
celebrities
who seem to have everything so easy. I believe
this
leads to some undesirable results.
To begin
with, these
celebrities
are always in the spotlight and reap a myriad of fans who show great admiration
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their idols. Most of these famous
people
are living extravagant lifestyles, wearing designer clothes and driving luxurious cars. Their admirers choose to support them by following their lifestyles
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and purchasing those pricy products, even if they cannot afford them.
Consequently
, these fans have to reduce the amount of money spent on other facets of their
lives
,
such
as health, workouts and
further
education lowering their life quality.
In addition
, exposure to the
lives
of well-known persons with ordinary backgrounds will inspire average
people
to obtain fame at any cost for the sake of achieving high-quality
lives
. In their desperation to gain fame, some of these
people
leak their porn clips online or make racist remarks, which not only achieves a bad name for them but
also
sets negative examples for others. In conclusion, ordinary
people
’s interest in
celebrities
can be attributed to the differences between their
lives
and those of famous ones, and
such
interest is a negative thing, since
this
may lower their life quality and make some of them embark on the wrong path.
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