In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? do you think this is a posetive or negative situation.

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Owning a home can be a very expensive and burdensome process,
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,
people
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still prefer buying their own
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instead
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of renting
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in some countries. In
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essay, I will explore the reasons why
people
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choose to buy a
house
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rather than rent
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. I think
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preference
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for buying over renting causes a negative impact on
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society.
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of the reasons why in some countries
people
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would prefer
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ownership
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is because it shows stronger economic power.
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, the housing price is high, take Taipei, Taiwan as an example, it will take 100 years for someone with a medium salary to save enough money to be able to purchase
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.
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, the ability to own a
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demonstrates an exceptional ability to earn more than average
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.
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, it shows the ability to provide food and shelter for a family.
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, since
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ownership
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demonstrates above-average abilities, in some cultures,
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ownership
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becomes a criterion for marriage. I think the absolute
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for owning a
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over renting causes a negative impact on society. It drives the real estate price unreasonably high due to demand and supply. Since
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naturally want to gain better societal status by showing they have above-average abilities, everyone would want to buy a
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.
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, the land is always limited to building
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a house
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house
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, as the demand increases, same as the housing price.
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preference
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also
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pressures young
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to bear the unnecessary burden to buy a
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in order to get married even if
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pressure could eventually result in unhappy marriages. Overall,
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ownership
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shows a better societal status and stronger economic power in some cultures which
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house
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ownership
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. I think
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preference
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produces a negative impact on society and should be corrected.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeownership
  • equity
  • financial security
  • status symbol
  • investment
  • real estate
  • property value appreciation
  • asset
  • community
  • belonging
  • renovation
  • customization
  • socio-political aspects
  • stability
  • permanence
  • rental uncertainties
  • life satisfaction
  • control over living conditions
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