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Nowadays, distance-learning programmers have gained in popularity( those teaching programmers that involve the use of written materials, video, television and the internet), but some people argue that courses can never be taken as good as those by attending a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People have different
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 about whether
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 will replace traditional college
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. In my opinion, both teaching methods are indispensable, and it is difficult to distinguish which one can be more vital in
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’
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. Admittedly,
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education
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 does have many advantages in terms of teaching programmers.
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 online teaching tools in virtual classes
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can make lessons much more interesting and productive.
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 brings more
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 learning materials,
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 relevant text materials, playing attractive videos, and using network resources.
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,
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 can study at their own pace.
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, they can click the pause button to take notes of the lessons in time making the learning more efficiently. Meanwhile,
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 save a lot of time because they are
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 need to commute to school.
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, for many
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, interaction with their peers is one of the best aspects of university
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.
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 is because face-to-face communication can strengthen the relationship between classmates and enhance
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’ social skills rather than interacting with virtual characters on the internet. During the covid-19 pandemic, many international
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 have to study online courses in their own
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. They may still be able to study academic courses and have group discussions with their classmates through online software, but they will never have the chance to experience the college’s atmosphere or local cultures. Based on
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 online
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 brings a lot of convenience and benefits to
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, there is a significant difference between virtual and real interaction. In conclusion, it is difficult to state whether one form of learning is better than another, as they cater for different learning needs. I think
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 should combine those two systems to better serve
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’ learning.

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