A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money,either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years,or to pay for two open concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter .describe the benefits of sponsoring the the sports team .summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts .say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam, I am one of the
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who
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in muscat. I heard your company collecting
feedbacks
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feedback
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from the residents regarding your fund. I would like to share my opinion regarding
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matter. Undoubtedly, the
sport
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team would be a huge
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for the children for many reasons.
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, the kids will
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new skills.
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,
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a convenient way to keep them fit and
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energetic
energatic
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,
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an efficient way to occupy them from street trobles and commit
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a crime
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crime
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.
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,
sponsor
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concerts will entertain all the society
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it
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since it
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has been
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time since we host a concert here. It would
diffenetly
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differently
attract people from other
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and
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our local economy will
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, my personal view is that to support the
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team for our
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because it will help them
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a lot
alot
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when they participate in competitions.
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, some kids may take
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seriously and take it as
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career. I thank you for
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opportunity by allowing the residents
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in
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election. Yours sincerely, Samah Ismail

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