A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money,either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years,or to pay for two open concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter .describe the benefits of sponsoring the the sports team .summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts .say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir or Madam, I am one of the

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in muscat. I heard your company collecting

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from the residents regarding your fund. I would like to share my opinion regarding

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matter. Undoubtedly, the

sport

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team would be a huge

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for the children for many reasons.

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, the kids will

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new skills.

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a convenient way to keep them fit and

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an efficient way to occupy them from street trobles and commit

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concerts will entertain all the society

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time since we host a concert here. It would

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attract people from other

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our local economy will

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, my personal view is that to support the

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team for our

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because it will help them

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when they participate in competitions.

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seriously and take it as

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career. I thank you for

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election. Yours sincerely, Samah Ismail

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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177 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In some parts of the world traditional festivals and celebrations have disappeared or are disappearing. What problems is this causing? What measures could be taken to counter this situation?

Globalization has led to the proliferation of multinational corporations, often at the expense of local businesses. Discuss the positive and negative impacts of this trend.

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