Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural life. How important is it for children to learn to understand and appreciate nature?

In
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world,
children
mostly spend their
time
indoors
.
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, it is believed that
children
should be exposed to
the
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more as it will help them relieve stress while
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active and
also
it will help the
children
to
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undestand
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about
nature
.
Firstly
, when the youngsters spend most of their
time
indoors
they will undergo mental illnesses
such
as stress, depression and sleep disturbance. It is true that
children
can be productive when
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indoors
such
as
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watching educational videos
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themselves by playing video games or chatting with friends.
Nevertheless
, the
children
will be spending most of the
time
in
same
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and after some
time
they will become
boared
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and cause above mentioned diseases. But when the
children
can go outside and learn to
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undestand
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and appreciate
the
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they will be able to eliminate or reduce mental illnesses.
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, when the
children
learn to go outside and appreciate
the
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nature
they will become more active.
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, when youngsters start loving
the
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nature
they will go on hikes or road trips which will lead to a healthy and active lifestyle.
Moreover
,spending more
time
outdoors is important as it will
also
boost confidence and help them to develop interpersonal and communication skills. outdoor exposure is
also
vital for
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studies
such
as
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environmental

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enviromental
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studies.
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, it is
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indespensable
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for
the
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children
to have exposure
of
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the
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nature
. In conclusion,
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of
children
made them
to
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spend more
time
indoors
.
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, admiring and exploring
nature
is important for
children
for both their mental and health
health
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