Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

It is argued that discovering a space counts as a very expensive process and
instead
of that, it is suggested to use
this
money
on more significant things.
This
essay agrees with
this
statement because it would be better to spend
this
money
on developing environmental aspects, and rebuilding or
renovation
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some education schools and universities. The environment is one of the most important aspects, which should receive a huge amount of
money
for its development. The
places
such
as green gardens, countryside fields, street parks, and other social areas must obtain government attention. One of the most problematic things is the lack of tree care. What I mean by that,
the
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is the

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shortage of looking after the green
places
will hugely impact
on
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ecology.
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, a new green area called Central Park was reconstructed after a long time. Some schools and universities are necessary to be reconstructed and renovated. What I mean by that, nowadays education
places
have a huge problem with
building
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the building

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, where students take
places
every day. The rooms are totally destroyed not because of people who work there, it is because of old build construction. To solve
this
, it is important
to
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for

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the government to take care
about
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of

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renovation or even replacement of the building for
population
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the population

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.
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, the location of a new Cambridge school in Uzbekistan was changed. The main reason was reconstruction. In conclusion, it is known that the importance of exploring space for scientific achievements takes a huge amount of
money
,
however
in my opinion it is
more
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preferable to spend
this
allocated
money
for
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on

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developing an environment and
also
reconstructing education areas.
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