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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

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It is argued that discovering a space counts as a very expensive process and
instead
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 of that, it is suggested to use
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money
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 on more significant things.
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 essay agrees with
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 statement because it would be better to spend
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money
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 on developing environmental aspects, and rebuilding or
renovation
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 some education schools and universities. The environment is one of the most important aspects, which should receive a huge amount of
money
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 for its development. The
places
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 as green gardens, countryside fields, street parks, and other social areas must obtain government attention. One of the most problematic things is the lack of tree care. What I mean by that,
the
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 shortage of looking after the green
places
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 will hugely impact
on
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ecology.
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, a new green area called Central Park was reconstructed after a long time. Some schools and universities are necessary to be reconstructed and renovated. What I mean by that, nowadays education
places
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 have a huge problem with
building
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the building
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, where students take
places
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 every day. The rooms are totally destroyed not because of people who work there, it is because of old build construction. To solve
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, it is important
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 the government to take care
about
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 renovation or even replacement of the building for
population
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the population
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.
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, the location of a new Cambridge school in Uzbekistan was changed. The main reason was reconstruction. In conclusion, it is known that the importance of exploring space for scientific achievements takes a huge amount of
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,
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 in my opinion it is
more
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preferable to spend
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 allocated
money
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for
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 developing an environment and
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 reconstructing education areas.

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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • myriad
  • pressing issues
  • allocated
  • advances
  • direct results
  • pave the way
  • uninhabitable
  • inspirational aspects
  • fuels innovation
  • shared goal
  • intellectual capital
  • budget overruns
  • tangible benefits
  • rationale
  • dedicating
  • returns on investment
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