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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #students #ability
Teaching
students
 who have been classified by their potential to learn is a problematic issue that must be compared with the idea that all learners can be learning together even with a different range of talent. Each side of
this
 view must explore with caution, so I am going to explain the advantages vs disadvantages to clarify
this
 issue. The existence of different ranges of power in some variety of talents and skills in
students
 in a class flourished the educational environment and making a collaboration to solving problems with together, so the ability of teamworking has been growing among
students
,
however
, It may be created the abnormal
behavior
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such
 as jealous
instead
 of competition or dominated the weaknesses through poor self-confidence. Talented
students
 may be bored with the slow rhythm of topics that have been presented in the class and separated from own their classmates and have loneliness in their educational environment, so they may be depressed during the period time. All youth must have learned there are some different groups of people are in society who have been proper in each job by their strength and abilities, so
this
 purpose when have been happened that we can be getting together,
however
, we must keep on our mind the proper organizing
students
 in different abilities is very critical to creating a good temper in educational space.
Finally
, I agreed with
this
 statement that believes all
students
 should be under training together because, they must learn teamworking, and deal with different people who have other abilities and skills,
however
 , designing an
enviroment
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environment
 for having a
priavte
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private
 space for each
students
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student
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 must be considered.
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