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Band 3.5

Governments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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Saving the
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environment
enviroment
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 became an important as well as a difficult task for
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government
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 these days. In order to
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achieve
acheive
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achieve
this
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,
Government
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emphasis
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to look
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 after their surrounding
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environment
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. I
am completely agree
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 with
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 statement.
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 of all, it is
worldwide
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a worldwide
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 task to save Earth, it is only possible if each individual
make
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 some
efforts
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 for
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 achievement. As we all know that the living condition on earth is becoming harsh day by day and that day is not far when there is survival on it become impossible, saving it from happening is
responsibility
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 of everyone. It can begin with taking care of the surroundings, so it will ultimately help in
contribution
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 to
save
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environment
enviroment
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the enviroment
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.
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,
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government
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 should encourage people by providing proper
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guidelines
guidlines
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guidelines
 and public awareness programmes.
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,
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the government
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aknowledge
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acknowledge
general
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 public about
need
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the need
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 to save
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environment
enviroment
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the enviroment
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 and
also
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 the methods which a person can adopt in order to reduce pollution.
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, use of public transport can help in
reduction
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the reduction
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 of
useage
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usage
 of private transports , which helps in reducing
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enviroment
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environmental
environment
 pollution.
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 how the
government
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 can make others more focused on rescuing
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environment
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enviroment
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. In conclusion, the measures must be taken by the
government
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 to save
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environment
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enviroment
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 by encouraging people to take care of their surrounding
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environment
enviroment
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environment
 by giving making them realise
it's
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importance
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the importance
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 and
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 by providing public awareness.
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