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Some people believe that smartphones are destroying social interaction today. To what extent do you agree or disagree.?

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Many assume that
smartphones
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 have undermined social interaction among
people
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 these days, but others think
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 device has a positive side. In my opinion, I don't think
smartphones
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 are destroying our communication because of the diversity of their existential advantages. On the one hand,
smartphones
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 decrease face-to-face interaction which means that there are not as many
people
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 today who meet and talk in person.
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, most coffee shops are filled with
friends
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 and families using their
phones
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 and not talking to each other. The result of
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 phenomenon is that
people
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 not only lose interest in harmonizing with their interlocutors but
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 do not find joy in their daily conversations. Researchers have shown that most
people
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 today would love spending most of their time utilizing
phones
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 rather than talking or meeting with
friends
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.
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,
smartphones
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 are famous for their versatility in helping humans make contact with each other better. There is the fact that
people
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 today can easily take advantage of social media
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 as Facebook, and Twitter to start online dating with
friends
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, join many chat groups, and make plans to hang out in person.
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, in
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 cruel pandemic with constant lockdown,
people
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 can leverage mobile
phones
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 and online platforms to keep in touch and maintain their existential relationships. In conclusion,
smartphones
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 have not demolished social intercourse among
people
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 because it gives
people
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 many new opportunities to connect with others, which did not exist in the past.
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, everyone should find a good way to use their
phones
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 to stay in touch with
friends
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 and family
instead
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 of spending time letting themself be shacked in their room

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limit
  • face-to-face communication
  • social media
  • loss of real connections
  • distract
  • engaging
  • empathy
  • personal connection
  • addictive
  • isolation
  • enhance
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