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In their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

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Most of the products include a large proportion of
sugar
, which has side effects
to
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human’s
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 health and
that
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the
price
 should be raised in order to encourage
people
 to eat a lesser amount of
sugar
. I don’t agree
to
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this
 statement.
First
 of all, we can’t deny the fact that a large quantity of
sugar
 has a bad impact on the health of
people
 but making it not affordable is a bad idea. Why is it so? It is because
sugar
 is an essential component for
people
 and not everyone has a bad lifestyle. In spite of adjusting the cost, making knowledge presentations about it and teaching how to eat properly should be a better way to help
people
 stay hygienic without taking any side effects. Rather than pricing up, making replacements
of
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sugar
 would be a better way of solving
this
 problem. Today, there are special substitutes for the ones who have diabetes which have less amount of
sugar
 but have the same taste
like
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 a normal one. Lowering the
price
 of artificial ones and making sure that they are safe will attract more
people
 to use them
instead
 of the original one which has a large quantity of sweetness. Not only that, we can encourage the
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sugar producing
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 companies to start manufacturing
sugar
 substitutes
instead
 of their normal products. To conclude, consuming too much
sugar
 is not good for our health but making it unaffordable is not society friendly. Regardless of expensing the
price
, giving
people
 knowledge about eating
sugar
 properly, making sure that substitutes are safe and producing more
of
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the artificial ones would create a better environment.
Thus
, I cannot agree with the statement that says we should
price
 up the
sugar
 to help
people
 take in less
sugar
.
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