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You have seen and advertisement for a couple, who lives in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year Write a letter to the couple. In your letter Explain why you think you would be suitable for this job Say what else you could do for the family Give your reason for wanting the job

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Dear Sir and Madam, Dear Sir and Madam, I am K.L Nimal Perera. I would like to inform you that, I am looking forward to
teach
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 your children.
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, I have followed a higher diploma in my native language.
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, I have 6 months of teaching experience for children who are below 15 years old. Apart from that, I live
in
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very close to your residence.
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, I have followed a child care course and I have more than one year
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on
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 caring
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 children.
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, I may
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 to teach some other necessary activities for your kids.
Moreover
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 I would say, I am
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good at cooking and especially
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 baby meal preparations.
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, I am searching for a job
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 earn
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 money to pay my university course fee. As I mentioned, I am able to come to work by bicycle and it
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 to save money on transportation. If you are interested
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 me, please let me inform over the phone. My phone number is 1122334455. Thank you Yours faithfully K.L.Nimal
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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