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Writing Samples
Band 1

Should young people follow older peoples 's example or it is good fir them to challenge older people 's opinion and thougts . Discuss both and give ur opinion .

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The generation is one of the most important topics that arguing between older
people
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yougster
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youngster
 for ages, about younger
people
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 should either listen or follow older one due to they have been through a lot of things longer than kids.  In my opinion, youngsters
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nowadays
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nowaday
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nowadays
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 have their own decisions to do or not to do something, and they should listen to older
people
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 but should not follow in everything they are
lead
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, I believe that they have their own thought to make a decision. Sometimes old
people
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was
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 not right.
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, our generation is growing up with the internet which
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 all of
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informations
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 that interested

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wisdom and experience
  • Tradition and cultural values
  • Invaluable
  • Identity and belonging
  • Progress and innovation
  • Fresh perspectives
  • Biases and limitations
  • Established norms
  • Critical thinking
  • Personal growth
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Balance
  • Outdated views
  • Openness
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