In many countries, children show less respect to elders. What are the causes of such behavior? What can be done to address this situation?

Respect is when someone
show
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their regard to the other from the
buttom
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bottom
of their heart. Nowadays,
both
parties haven’t converse enough due to how a modern
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society
socity
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society
work and it makes
both
parties think they did it right.
Therefore
, children would pay respect to
elders
less.
First
of all, in modern
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society
socity
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society
where competition is a norm.
Kids
in
this
generation tend to have less time
talking
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to talk
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to
other
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others
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.
For example
, students have to go to extra classes after school in order to get a better grade and make it to great institutes in the future. In the end,
this
will cause them
misunderstand
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to misunderstand
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or lack
of
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what another party
thinkings
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is thinkings
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.
In addition
,
generation
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the generation
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gap is
also
a reason.
Kids
don’t understand what the
elders
are talking about and why they keep their outdated reasons.
For instance
, the
elders
keep teaching them to read
the
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book to get better
in
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at
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English.
This
method made them get their best result in their lifetime without doubt but for the
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children
childrens
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children
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who grow up with technology would find
this
ridiculous. They would ask why should we have to read when we can just listen to music or watch
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the movie
a movie
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movie
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to learn English.
On the other hand
, the
elders
only see these
kids
just playing around.
This
can be solved if
both
parties communicate with another party and open up. Listen to what they want to say and give
both
of your reasons and opinions and try to understand their standings and their point of view. In conclusion, modern societies force the
elders
and
kids
apart from each other and make them think that what they did is the only right thing to do.
However
, respect comes from understanding the other so I ought to say that
open
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being open
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to each other is
crucial
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a crucial
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key in
this
situation.
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