In many countries, children show less respect to elders. What are the causes of such behavior? What can be done to address this situation?

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Respect is when someone

show

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shows

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their regard to the other from the

buttom

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bottom

of their heart. Nowadays,

both

parties haven’t converse enough due to how a modern

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society

socity

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society

work and it makes

both

parties think they did it right.

Therefore

, children would pay respect to

elders

less.

First

of all, in modern

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society

socity

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society

where competition is a norm.

Kids

this

generation tend to have less time

talking

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other

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others

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For example

, students have to go to extra classes after school in order to get a better grade and make it to great institutes in the future. In the end,

this

will cause them

misunderstand

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to misunderstand

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or lack

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what another party

thinkings

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is thinkings

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In addition

generation

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the generation

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gap is

also

a reason.

Kids

don’t understand what the

elders

are talking about and why they keep their outdated reasons.

For instance

, the

elders

keep teaching them to read

the

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apply

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book to get better

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English.

This

method made them get their best result in their lifetime without doubt but for the

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children

childrens

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children

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who grow up with technology would find

this

ridiculous. They would ask why should we have to read when we can just listen to music or watch

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the movie

a movie

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movie

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to learn English.

On the other hand

, the

elders

only see these

kids

just playing around.

This

can be solved if

both

parties communicate with another party and open up. Listen to what they want to say and give

both

of your reasons and opinions and try to understand their standings and their point of view. In conclusion, modern societies force the

elders

and

kids

apart from each other and make them think that what they did is the only right thing to do.

However

, respect comes from understanding the other so I ought to say that

open

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being open

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to each other is

crucial

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a crucial

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key in

this

situation.

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