Some people argue that parents of children who break the law should be punished in some way, because they are responsible for their children’s actions. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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the development of a new era,there is no denying the fact that people’s wisdom
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enhanced due to the evolution of society.But recently,our society still
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the people who educate their child in
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wrong way.As a matter of fact,wrong education
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is the child’s bad actions and
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responsibility. Looking at the argument for the view that
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of the children who break the law should be punished
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somehow. It is admitted that some of them prove to be strong.In fact,one common justification is that the major factor which
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,when the kids grow up,
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tho their child’s personality,and the
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makes their child think that breaking the law
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is not that serious to be punished.A
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good point worth considering here is that the
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parent’s personality.The bad personality
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their child to be a good person because children always notice and copy what their
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do and think that
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should be punishable.It is easily can be seen that most
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the serial killers often have to deal with a bad
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childhood
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parents
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are often alcoholics,prostitutes,
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which affected seriously to children’s antisocial
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. In conclusion,children after all just an innocent people,and
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is the main factor which leads to their bad actions
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  • firstly
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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