Some people argue that parents of children who break the law should be punished in some way, because they are responsible for their children’s actions. To what extent do you agree or disagree
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the people who educate their child in Change the verb form
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wrong way.As a matter of fact,wrong education Correct article usage
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cause
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a tremendous consequences
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Looking at the argument for the view that Correct the word
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parents
of the children who break the law should be punished in
somehow. It is admitted that some of them prove to be strong.In fact,one common justification is that the major factor which Change preposition
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effect
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makes their child think that breaking the law Correct your spelling
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it
is not that serious to be punished.A Correct pronoun usage
apply
further
good point worth considering here is that the the
parent’s personality.The bad personality Remove the redundancy
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In conclusion,children after all just an innocent people,and Change the spelling
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
