Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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school
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curriculum unpaid
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service should be introduced. And I completely agree that working for
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from young
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help
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students
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become
a
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helpful
members
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of society.
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, allocating some parts of high
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programmes for free
community
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services makes
students
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learn how to contribute to the development of their societies. Take planting more trees in neighbourhoods as an example,
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initiative makes the local area have
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beautiful green image.
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that, the more trees, the less CO2. Eventually,
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effort
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effort
gives rise to
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influence on making
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live longer.
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, giving voluntary
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service
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service
for
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others
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helps
students
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build a unique skill to integrate fast into communities. Having interacted with different
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,
students
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soon know how to deal with
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with various
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traits.
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, they eventually stop being shy
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communicating with
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. And
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natural process helps them become a real part of a whole society.
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, if unpaid
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service becomes
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part
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of
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school
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syllabus,
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might discover their latent talents
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what they truly have inclinations. Apparently, many
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still
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finding
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their true interests even though they have become grown-ups or adults. Because while working for
charity
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a charity
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,
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, might find
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that
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free service is his or her long-sought job which was undiscovered.
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, improving a sense of sympathy toward
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such
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the disabled or the elderly might come from voluntary services, that's why these sorts of free services for
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communities
communinities
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communities
should be compulsory for high
school
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students
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. In conclusion, some
people
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say that free
community
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services
sevices
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services
should be mandatory for
students
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studying
universities
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and I
also
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believe that it is true with its many
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students
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related benefits.
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