Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Growing up in a society that owes to the dedicated work of the proceeding generations, young
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tend to take all the facilities for granted or at least perceive that all conditions should be made possible for them by others.
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, in order to prevent
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selfish-like
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in the youth, I believe, compulsory
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service
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should be an integral part of every
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to render students more
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. The primary reason why students should be made to work for free is the possibility of developing certain good qualities in their
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, humbleness, commitment, considerateness,
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and generosity
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,
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, in order to nurture these qualities successfully in young
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, educators themselves should
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set
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example,
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dedicated to
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duties and not regarding them as a burden or distraction from education. Motivated to do something for the good of the society alongside
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their teachers and peers, students do not only feel
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sense of fulfilment, but
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they grow up as supportive and aspiring citizens of the country. Another reason why mandatory
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service
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should be a part of
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school
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the school
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curriculum is that young
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will be equipped with the qualities of independent
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. No doubt that
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is an essential quality for a businessman or an entrepreneur,
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, needless to say,
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independent-thinkers raised in the spirit of making
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contribution
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for the common good will make caring successful
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, whom the nation can potentially rely on.
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, most ordinary entrepreneurs in China do not evade taxes thanks to their
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education that obliges children to do
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service
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. In conclusion, considering the positive traits formed in children’s
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thanks to
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service
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,
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practice, I believe, should certainly be a part of
high
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the high
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school
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program so that society and
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the state
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benefit from it directly and indirectly.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compulsory
  • unpaid community service
  • charity
  • neighborhood improvement
  • teaching sports
  • empathy
  • social justice
  • transferable skills
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • problem-solving
  • civic duty
  • civic engagement
  • educational enhancement
  • practical experiences
  • academic learning
  • real-world applications
  • social cohesion
  • mutual support
  • time management
  • balancing priorities
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