Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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With the advancement of modern technology, the types and amounts of

advertisements

are keeping innovating and increasing separately and rapidly. At the moment, some

people

may believe that advertising has done an extraordinarily great job that it has persuades a lot of

people

to buy

products

. While others oppose and claim that advertising has been a common phenomenon that no

one

needs to pay attention to at all. In

this

essay, I will discuss both views

firstly

and suggest partial opinions based on various reasons

secondly

To begin

with, we have to admit that

that has creativity, uniqueness and pertinence will stimulate individuals' desire of purchasing certain

products

. To exemplify that, Apple, as

one

of the most successful companies that sell electronic

products

, makes great profit by selling iPhones, IPads, and watches and its sales volume still keeps rising annually.

One

of the reasons that Apple can be

such

an outstanding and successful company is its unique

. With the simple colour of the basic atmosphere, Apple's

describes its

products

with simple words and music, and stereoscopic display properly, which, perfectly stimulates its customers' desire of buying its

products

On the other hand

, an

that is

repetitive and consistently, and dropped unpractically will make customers feel repugnant. And unfortunately, nowadays, most

advertisements

are

such

types.

For example

, when users log into Youtube, they often need to watch an advertising clip which lasts for 15 seconds before they can watch the video they want. And that advertising clip is often irrelevant to users' practical situations. The frequency of users watching an advertising clip

that is

irrelevant is much higher than they

watching

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watch

show examples

a relevant

one

Therefore

people

will choose to ignore them automatically, no matter whether it is related or not. From my point of view, it is true that some

advertisements

that are creative, unique, and pertinent, have the ability to attract customers and make them buy their

products

However

, these fancy

advertisements

are usually flooded by a large amount of low-quality

advertisements

that

people

often ignore. To conclude,

advertisements

should be made with more creativity, uniqueness, and pertinence. At the same time, lower the amount of low-quality

advertisements

, so that

people

will have the desire of buying, or they will just keep feeling disgusting and choose to ignore them more.

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5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

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384 words

6.00

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
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distracting
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