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Write a letter to the organizer of an annual festival that you attended last year. Include - Feedback about last year - An offer to volunteer - Questions about the festival

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Dear Mrs Johns, I am Haniye Sarabi and I am writing to express my desire to be a member of your outstanding team for
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 year’s local cuisines festival.
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 year, I attended the festival
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 place at the central park in September with my mother. We were coming back from an afternoon jogging and the electrified crowd caught our attention. As we approached, we became shocked by the festival being held and all the tempting international colourful dishes at the booths. Everything was significantly well-organized from the music, food, people of your team,etc. I followed Instagram of the festival and realized the credit goes to you.
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 with, I am from Iran and
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 foods are hard to neglect. Needless to say, I am an expert at cooking local
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 meals
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 as Kobideh, Tahchin,
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 sabzi, etc. Since Canada offered the opportunity to myriad ethics to live alongside. I believe food festivals are the best approach to touch other immigrants' cultures.
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 is the fourth spoken language in Vancouver, I would be pleased if I could have the chance to participate in your group to provide
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 dishes.
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, I would like to ask you about the estimated time
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 year’s festival is going to be held and the location you are considering for
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. Could you please let me know if there is a place for me to volunteer as a
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 representative? Looking forward to hearing from you. Kind regards, Haniye Sarabi

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