You eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day.. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved Write at least 150 words. Begin your letter as follows: Dear __________

#college #cafeteria #lunch #time #improvements #magazine #__________

Dear Editor of Amazing Post, Hope

this

letter finds you well. I am writing

this

letter to propose a couple of suggestions for the

cafeteria

located at the heart of our campus. I must say I really enjoy having dinner at the

cafeteria

because of its tranquil atmosphere and service. It has become a symbol of our school given it is one of the old and most famous restaurants in our community. Its delicious food combined with impeccable service left me with a strong impression.

However

, along with its growing popularity, there is a growing number of customers coming to the restaurants, undermining the dining experience. People are constrained to small spaces for activity and packed like sardines. The ventilation system, at the same time, does not work well, so people can hardly breathe fresh air. I would like to take

such

a chance and give some advice to make the restaurant even more amazing. Apparently, since the small

cafeteria

can't accommodate so many visitors at the moment, it is necessary to expand its space. Preferably, the

cafeteria

should fix the ventilation system and improve its air quality. These are just a number of suggestions from me as a faithful customer of

school

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cafeteria

. I am looking forward to the improvement of it. Kindly regards Clarence Peng

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