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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is argued by some
people
 that
design
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 of newly constructed
buildings
 in big cities should be controlled by authorities, whereas others say that those who finance the construction of a building should be able to
design
 it according to their own
wish
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. In my opinion, designing a building is more than what you want, it is the harmony of what is beautiful and functional, and
therefore
 it is the job of
architectures
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architecture
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. On the one hand, most
of
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the
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people
 want to live in their dream home, and in order to
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this
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 they spend a lot of money. They think that since they are paying, they can
constructure
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structure
 the building reckon with their own taste
of
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in
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 architecture. According to these
people
 living in a home that you pay,
yet
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 could not
design
 the outside of it, is similar to
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 in somewhere you have to.
On the other hand
, other
people
 say that governments should choose the aspects of
buildings
. These
people
 believe that the
city
 should not be seen as a mixture of different structures. Government should define a specific
color
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, and style for the type of houses for a regular look.
People
 are free to
design
 inside of their houses as they want to because it is only akin to them, but
outside
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 of the house represents the
city
 with the other structures,
therefore
 it should be
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clarify
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clear
 by the government. In my opinion, if it had been so suitable for everyone to sketch a home
then
 architecture would not
been
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 a special discipline thought in universities.
Moreover
, it is true that
buildings
 in the
city
tells
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 a lot about the
city
, so if a
city
 has complex and unmatching
buildings
 it means that it has a careless authority.
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