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Some people say protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility, others believe individuals should be responsible for it. To what extend do you agree

#people #environment #government’s #responsibility #individuals
Advancements in technology
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exploitation
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resources
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 rainforest are
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 the edge of extinction, as well as the recent exponential increase in atmospheric carbon store. Some may
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 the
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government
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 role to protect the earth. Yet, I believe the
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fundamental
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fundamental
 responsibility should be taken by us.
To begin
 with, deforestation is caused by
indviduls
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individuals
such
 as businessmen
hence
, they should take the responsibility.
For instance
, soy plantation and cattle ranching are the dominant reasons for deforestation, considering investors cut down
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 for
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agriculture
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 purposes, carbon is
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 released
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 the atmosphere leading to a rise in temperature.
Furthermore
, research has found that cattle ranching has caused 80% of Co2 emissions in the tropical rainforest.
This
 outlines how
individual
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 should take the
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responsibility
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to protect the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
 as they are the reason
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 destruction.
On the other hand
, some
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 that it is the
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government's
governemnt's
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government's
 duty to protect the environment as the state has the most power.
Such
 as plastic bag
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levy
 in Taiwan, where citizens need to pay for plastic bags.
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 schemes are effective as
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 could reduce the
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demand
 for
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plastic
 significantly.
Nevertheless
, the government has the duty to educate the general public about environmental protection, since some citizens may not fully understand
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 of global warming. All in all, after
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 both factors, I reckon individuals have the obligation to protect the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
 as it is not solely the
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government
goverment
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government
 itself causing the damage to the ecosystem.
Hence
, protecting the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
 should not be the state's duty but
individuals
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the individuals
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 who contributed to the destruction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental policies
  • restrictions on pollution
  • renewable energy use
  • natural habitats
  • global environmental issues
  • climate change
  • Paris Agreement
  • eco-friendly habits
  • environmental footprint
  • sustainable practices
  • collective action
  • framework
  • regulations
  • sustainable future
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