Some people say protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility, others believe individuals should be responsible for it. To what extend do you agree

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the edge of extinction, as well as the recent exponential increase in atmospheric carbon store. Some may
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the
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role to protect the earth. Yet, I believe the
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responsibility should be taken by us.
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with, deforestation is caused by
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individuals
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as businessmen
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, they should take the responsibility.
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, soy plantation and cattle ranching are the dominant reasons for deforestation, considering investors cut down
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for
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purposes, carbon is
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the atmosphere leading to a rise in temperature.
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, research has found that cattle ranching has caused 80% of Co2 emissions in the tropical rainforest.
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outlines how
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should take the
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responsibility
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responsibility
to protect the
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environment
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environment
as they are the reason
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destruction.
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, some
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that it is the
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government's
duty to protect the environment as the state has the most power.
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as plastic bag
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in Taiwan, where citizens need to pay for plastic bags.
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schemes are effective as
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could reduce the
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for
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significantly.
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, the government has the duty to educate the general public about environmental protection, since some citizens may not fully understand
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of global warming. All in all, after
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both factors, I reckon individuals have the obligation to protect the
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environment
enviroment
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environment
as it is not solely the
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goverment
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itself causing the damage to the ecosystem.
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, protecting the
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environment
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environment
should not be the state's duty but
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who contributed to the destruction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental policies
  • restrictions on pollution
  • renewable energy use
  • natural habitats
  • global environmental issues
  • climate change
  • Paris Agreement
  • eco-friendly habits
  • environmental footprint
  • sustainable practices
  • collective action
  • framework
  • regulations
  • sustainable future
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