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Many manufactory food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, Which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 claim that many manufactory food and drink
products
 that are rich in
sugar
 lead to
health
 problems.
Moreover
, they should be more expensive in order to encourage
people
 not to consume so much
sugar
. As far as I am concerned, sugary
products
 play a highly important role in our alimentation. That's because they are a source of
energy
.
However
, when we consume a great amount of
sugar
 for a very long time, we are highly likely to develop
health
 issues.
This
 essay will discuss the essential role that
sugar
 has in nutrition and how to avoid
health
 problems caused by sugary
products
.
To begin
 with, small quantities of
sugar
 are vital for a balanced diet.
Besides
, studies show that we should eat daily a small amount of sweets so our body can function properly.
In addition
, sugary
products
 are a rich source of
energy
. In fact, the moment you feel you lack
energy
 and eat a square of chocolate, your body feels recharged.
For instance
, a school in France brought in a system that involves giving children a sweet product before having their physical education classes.
Subsequently
, it was
showed
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shown
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 that children's level of
energy
 significantly improved.
On the other hand
,
people
 should be aware of the consequences that manufactory
products
, which contain high levels of
sugar
 have. In order to maintain a healthy lifestyle, they should purchase
fruitty
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fruity
fruit
products
 that are rich in vitamins and contain a moderate level of
sugar
.
However
, it does not mean that sugary
products
 should become more expensive to encourage
people
 to consume less
sugar
. Still, they should document themselves regarding the unhealthy ingredients a product contains before actually buying it in order to prevent the development of many
health
 issues.
For instance
, a campaign was conducted in the UK regarding the nocive effects of some overused ingredients that can be found in a diversity of manufactory
products
.
As a result
,
people
 had no idea about the damage they produce in our bodies in the long run. In summary, I strongly consider that
people
 should be aware of the level of
sugar
 a product has before buying it.
Additionally
, the price of sugary
products
 should not change, because sweets are essential for our alimentation, even though, in big quantities, food rich in
sugar
 is nocive.
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