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Some believe that in the next 100 years most people will have a better life, while others disagree. What is your opinion?

#believe #years #people #life
An immensely controversial phenomenon in the contemporary epoch today relates to whether
future
 generations will have a quality of
lifesyle
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lifestyle
 or not.
Furthermore
,the fact that there is trendemous growth in
technology
 and modernization,
i
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 firmly accede it is a positive tendency and withstand the stated notion.
This
 essay will
further
 elucidate my assertion in the forthcoming paragraph.
To begin
 with,the most pivotal element is the
technology
 that the entire world has intensely invested in and taking the grace advantage of it to live a happy life in
future
.
Moreover
,it will enhance productivity and creativity in many
genarations
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generations
such
 that it will be able to provide resources for a sustainable economy.
For example
,90% of institutions have
adapted
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technology
such
 that every learner will have
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exposure to the system.
Therefore
,evolution will facilitate prosperity in many decades to follow because productivity will be efficient.
Secondly
,life can be miserable in the
next
 many years,if there is no effort to engage in areas that can for sure enhance
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 of life.Modernization requires
the
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society to go the extra mile to be
at
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topnotch
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 and choose what
broaden
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 their horizons,
otherwise
 learning these attributes requires dedication and perseverance.
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,
a
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 research done by the University of Nairobi depicts that 90% of
future
 communities will require to learn
technology
 excellently to outshine previous ages.
Therefore
,a finer lifestyle
come
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 along by being industrious and being on the lookout for the current trend with the intent we are not overtaken by robots To sum up,the composition,
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 would like to restate my perspective that automation is
such
 a better way of enhancing
future
 excellency whereby in the
next
 hundred years it will be full of glory.
However
,
the
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 society should be ready to toil to make it a success.
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