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Some believe that in the next 100 years most people will have a better life, while others disagree. What is your opinion?

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An immensely controversial phenomenon in the contemporary epoch today relates to whether
future
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 generations will have a quality of
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lifestyle
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,the fact that there is trendemous growth in
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 and modernization,
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 firmly accede it is a positive tendency and withstand the stated notion.
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 elucidate my assertion in the forthcoming paragraph.
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 with,the most pivotal element is the
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 that the entire world has intensely invested in and taking the grace advantage of it to live a happy life in
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.
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,it will enhance productivity and creativity in many
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generations
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 that it will be able to provide resources for a sustainable economy.
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,90% of institutions have
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technology
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 that every learner will have
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exposure to the system.
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,evolution will facilitate prosperity in many decades to follow because productivity will be efficient.
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,life can be miserable in the
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 many years,if there is no effort to engage in areas that can for sure enhance
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 of life.Modernization requires
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society to go the extra mile to be
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topnotch
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 and choose what
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 their horizons,
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 learning these attributes requires dedication and perseverance.
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 research done by the University of Nairobi depicts that 90% of
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 communities will require to learn
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 excellently to outshine previous ages.
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,a finer lifestyle
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 along by being industrious and being on the lookout for the current trend with the intent we are not overtaken by robots To sum up,the composition,
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 would like to restate my perspective that automation is
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 excellency whereby in the
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 hundred years it will be full of glory.
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 society should be ready to toil to make it a success.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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