In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

In recent years, the
trend
of buying from shopping
malls
is increasing
tremandously
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tremendously
,
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where as
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small local
shops
suffered a lot due to decreasing sales.
This
is a positive
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as far
a
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my point of view. Due to shopping
malls
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,malls
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people get the goods at
better
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a better
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price
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prices
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, quality goods and customer service. Another striking point is that
closure
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the closure
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of local
shops
helps in reducing traffic,
pollution
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and pollution
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and improves health and
environment
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the environment
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.
Firstly
, the
trend
of buying from big
malls
suddenly increases due to
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availability
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availabily
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availability
of all types of
thing
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things
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at stop place.
This
trend
is supported by family and individual class people. The choice of various brands
particully
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particularly
speaking of
cloths
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clothes
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is find
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at
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one place, where one can get better material and competitive
price
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prices
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and updated fashion.
This
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huge
malls
have
palying
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playing
areas, cinemas, restaurants,
cafe
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cafes
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and
shops
of
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for
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every individual needs.
Secondly
, the mall era is beneficial for the society in many ways
such
as it reduces the traffic in local markets which leads to less air and noise pollution in
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run better air quality due to that human life span will increase and
also
with quality air the environment will
develp
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develop
better and we get sufficient amount of rain each year. Which gives better vegetables. Like
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we can avoid any type of pandemic situation . To conclude ,
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the closure
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of local
shops
will be
blessing
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a blessing
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for nature and
human
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humans
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, the big
malls
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mall's
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era will be the popular
trend
in every part of the world considering the benefits to environmental aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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