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Transport preferences among young people in different countries

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This
 bar chart illustrates the type of movement choices among young
people
 in Great Britain,
USA
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the USA
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, Germany and France which
was
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were
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 all measured in percentage. Overall, the most significant facts to emerge from the graph are that majority of the countries preferred
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the car
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car
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cars
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 as their choice of movement. Though, the
use
 of other means of transportation can't be ignored.
To begin
, young
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with, young
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people
 in France preferred the
use
 of
car
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a car
the car
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 with over 70%.
Similarly
, Great Britain and USA
also
 love to
use
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a car
the car
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car
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cars
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 which was seen to be 60%.
Bicycle
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The bicycle
A bicycle
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 was the
second
 preferred means of movement in Great Britain which was 30%, while in
USA
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the USA
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,
Motorcycle
 was the
second
 choice for young
people
 at the rate of 30%. Young
people
 in
first
 and
second
 countries made the least usage of
Motorcycle
 and
Bicycle
 at 10% respectively. In France, the
use
 of
Bicycle
 and
Motorcycle
 was reduced which was fairly less than 15%
In contrast
, the preferred means of transportation by young
people
 in Germany was
Bicycle
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the Bicycle
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 which was slightly above 40%. It was followed by
car
 at
40
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a 40
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% rate. The least of the transport
use
 was
Motorcycle
 which was approximately 15%. Word count 198
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