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Some older people struggle with use of modern electronic technology such as smartphones and computers . Writes the cause and the propose a solution

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With the globalization of the
world
, technology has approached an immense level of development.
This
 can clearly be seen in smartphones and computers. It has rapid development over a very fewer period of time. As the younger generation is always dealing with
the
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technology, they can easily move forward with these improvements. Unfortunately, the smart
world
 has become a serious challenge to the elderly generation.
Firstly
, most
of
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the older aged people still used to read newspapers and watch television to get daily updates
of
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 the
world
. Even though
,
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 the
world
 has developed up to each and every aspect, the senior community is using very simple and uncomplicated mobile phones.
As a result
, they cannot access
to
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online banking facilities, google maps and get the latest updates on the
world
.
Therefore
, they had to spend both time and money on the roads unnecessarily.
However
, to overcome
this
 problem, we can set up some useful strategies. As they are utilizing simple smart mobiles, easy accessing apps with large numerical can be introduced.
Moreover
, the advantages of modern technology can be educated through the commercials and newspapers, as they are more prefer to watch them.
Furthermore
, education campaigns can be conducted by the authorities of the local government. To sum up, not only the younger generation but
also
 the senior society should take benefit of these latest advancements to ease their daily activities. It will be more precise if the government tend to take more responsibility, not only to provide food and medication but
also
 to ease their daily lifestyle patterns.
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